Sunday, October 16, 2011Open Prompt 3 10/16/2011
1973. An effective literary work does not merely stop or cease; it concludes. In the view of some critics, a work that does not provide the pleasure of significant closure has terminated with an artistic fault. A satisfactory ending is not, however, always conclusive in every sense; significant closure may require the reader to abide with or adjust to ambiguity and uncertainty. In an essay, discuss the ending of a novel or play of acknowledged literary merit. Explain precisely how and why the ending appropriately or inappropriately concludes the work. Do not merely summarize the plot.
Some endings are beautiful while other endings are not. In Shakespeare’s Romeo and Juliet the ending is the pinnacle of the plot. It is the most crucial part of the entire play. This creates a beautiful perfect ending to show what true love is.
Shakespeare does a beautiful job of concluding Romeo and Juliet. One sign of a good ending is that all of your questions have been answered. In the end of Romeo and Juliet you know exactly what happens. Also it is a true tragic ending because both the main characters end lower than where they started. They booth die.
Next the ending of Romeo and Juliet proves that they were in love. For Shakespeare True love means that you will do anything to be with that person. Even when your families hate each other, as they do in Romeo and Juliet. In the cases of Romeo and Juliet, Juliet killed herself after realizing that Romeo has killed himself for her. This is the ultimate act of love because they would rather be dead than live without one another.
Finally for Shakespeare true love is a willingness to do anything for another person. Romeo and Juliet are good examples of what you should do or be willing to do when you love someone. He seems to be arguing that you should go to the ends of the universe and back for the person you love. He also argues that you should do this despite your situation. In Romeo and Juliet’s case their situation was that their families hated each other. Most people would have found it hard to love each other in such a difficult situation. Romeo and Juliet loved each other despite that. Shakespeare’s definition of true love is that you would do anything despite outside factors for that person and Romeo and Juliet made the ultimate sacrifice for each other.
In conclusion Shakespeare creates a perfect ending to show what the meaning of true love is. He argues that love is never ending. He also argues that love should be the end all be all. Shakespeare’s Romeo and Juliet has a beautiful perfect ending.
I think you could have maybe connected a few of those sentences in the first paragraph; the short sentences on their own seem extremely choppy. Connect sentences with commas/semicolons or conjugations and you'll achieve better flow in your writing.
ReplyDeleteYour topic sentences need more. Topic sentences basically map out the entire paragraph, and you don't have any details in your topic sentence to show how you will support the point you are trying to make.
In the end, your conclusion leaves me confused. You don't come full circle and wrap up what you wrote in the essay.
Be careful to not state things many times just in different ways. In your introduction you say " In Shakespeare’s Romeo and Juliet the ending is the pinnacle of the plot. It is the most crucial part of the entire play." That is just stating the same thing twice. Also you start your whole essay with "Some endings are beautiful while other endings are not". You may thing an ending is beautiful while others do not. And what makes an ending beautiful? Such a reach opinion is probably not how you want to start your essay. You also really need to work on your thesis. Your thesis is supposed to show what your essay will cover but you do not include anything about meaning, effects, or techniques. The prompt even states " Explain PRECISELY how and why the ending appropriately or inappropriately concludes the work" Your thesis does not answer how or why and that is what the thesis is for.
ReplyDeleteSome of what you use as evidence does not always seem to be the best thing for your argument. You argue that Romeo and Juliet is about true love, but there are many who believe they did not share love at all,simply childish lust. Your evidence could be used to prove the opposing point true.
The big things to work on are your introductions and you evidence. You intro needs to show the reader you know what you are talking about and you have a clear way to explain your opinion. Your evidence must support your point.