2008. In a literary work, a minor character, often known as a foil, possesses traits that emphasize, by contrast or comparison, the distinctive characteristics and qualities of the main character. For example, the ideas or behavior of a minor character might be used to highlight the weaknesses or strengths of the main character. Choose a novel or play in which a minor character serves as a foil for the main character. Then write an essay in which you analyze how the relation between the minor character and the major character illuminates the meaning of the work.
Shakespeare often employs foils to prove a point. In Much Ado About Nothing Don Pedro and Don Jon are foils. Don Pedro is good while Don Jon is evil. Shakespeare uses Don Pedro to set an example of how you should live your life and what happens to Don Jon proves that.
First Don Pedro and Don Jon are foils. Don Pedro is a father and the ruler of the city. He is generally well liked by the townspeople. While Don Jon is a "bastard." He has three followers. He is mean and is always trying to get back at people. Don Pedro and Don Jon are booth manipulating, however Don Pedro uses his powers of manipulation for the good of others while Don Jon manipulates people to further his own cause.
Next Don Pedro is used as an example. In the end Don Jon is exiled. This is Shakespeare's way of saying that you should not act similarly to Don Jon because you may face being exiled as well. Shakespeare argues that you should be giving and loving. You should be willing to do anything for the people you care about. Particulary if you are upper class.
Don Pedro in Much Ado About Nothing is used as an example as how people should live their lifes and Don Jon is used as an example of how you should not live your life.
Your introduction seems to be a bit choppy, I was able to find your thesis, however, the sentence leading from the topic to the thesis is a bit vague. I would also suggest using textual evidence to support your claim. You didn't really support your claim either, you can do this by finding examples from the piece of reading and further explaining them in your body paragraphs.
ReplyDeleteI think you have a really great idea for a thesis, but I would work on rewording it so that it has more clarity and "power". After all, first impressions are important, and your thesis statement is your most important sentence. I would definitely try to include more cited quotes to help support the statements that you make here, like in your second paragraph for example, which is pretty generalized. The statements at the end of your second to last paragraph also especially need some more details and support. Use DIDLS if you ever get stuck.
ReplyDeleteThe first thing that i noticed from the your essay is how short it is. Your essay should never be barely past twice the size of your prompt, if it is, then you need to add more stuff to your essay because you're either not going in depth enough or you're missing something from the prompt that you didn't answer.
ReplyDeleteAlso, you might want to add something general at the start of your intro because instantly jumping right into an essay makes it feel like you're rushed. You may be, but you never want to make it seem like you're not paying attention to those details.
Again, work on those choppy and casual sentences. You're supposed to be nice and inviting, not blunt and demurring